Chapter Two

Lookie, lookie! (I am new enough at this blogging thing that I am still excited when I have a substantial update.)

I have finished Chapter Two (really the second half of chapter one.) It is a chapter which features both action (well, somewhat) and character-building teary scenes. It also includes the first public mentions of: Zena’s sexist community, Sheena’s identity clash, the formality of Kenezai, Cragg’s disconnection from his parents, and What is Likely to Happen to Nora if She Lets her Emotional Problems Run Away From Her.

It was fun to write. I like writing emotion.


Main Plot

The main plot of the original:

Nora and Petto live alone in their half of the Snow Mountains. Nora hears ominous sounds from the other half, belonging to the Irkas. Zena, Sheeno, Jhacks, and Bob the Scout all show up at some point. They spy on Irkas. Nora befriends one of the mysterious Tangas, who hide in a region right near hers, but the leader doesn’t trust her. Irkas attack. Petto speaks to one of them. Irkas are defeated. They attack again while everyone is sleeping and force a surrender due to holding Petto at spear-point. Nora surrenders. They are planning to kill Petto anyway when Bob, who has been working as a double agent for Nora’s group, jumps at the Irka to stop him and is killed. Horrified, the Irkas, who are, after all, middle-school age, start to retreat and have to go through a battle with the Tangas in the process. In the end, they sign a peace treaty and the one really evil Irka is kicked out after he protests. It ends with Petto preparing to move out because she wants to live in a tree on the nearby prairie and Nora still being sad about Bob but being hopeful about the future. (In a very cheesy ending line that I hated even as I wrote it.) Read the whole story Here.

I don’t quite know the ending of the re-imagined version yet, but I know the beginning. Kana, currently in a very long war, drafts all able adults from the ages of eighteen to fifty, leaving the young adults (ages fifteen to seventeen) of the household in charge. This seems like a big task, but all food is still supplied to the colony and being in charge of the household is really only keeping it running in terms of chores and such. The real problem, which all main characters will get involved with, is the running of the town council and keeping tension down between religious sects. (Each one occupies a different mini mountain, so town council members are almost always representing the religion of the area.) “Irkas” is a derogatory term for one group, which will be seduced into separating by the new version of the one really evil Irka. (An adult, not originally of the colony.)


I dubbed Snow Mountains “soft-core fantasy” because it is fantasy in the sense that I made up the place (The Snow Mountains are located in the fictional country of Kana) but there is no magic or anything totally inconceivable. What I call soft-core fantasy exists in a world that could be our own, where the physics and the people are familiar.

The names of the original places remain the same in the new version. The main difference is how they are used. In the original, the mountains got fairly warm but never melted. The people who inhabited them had for generations, despite several problems of violence and a few displacements. The current members of the families who were tied to the land were children, the last pieces of a feud between their parents. (More on that later.) It was all a bit melodramatic.

The first thing I changed was to add tons more people. The snow mountains became a colony, consisting of people of many religions and cultures. As in the original, Uto is the nearest Kanian town, which supplies the still-young colony with food and cast-off clothing. Oh, and the mountains are cold most of the time, as I couldn’t find a logical reason they wouldn’t be.